Gonna clean up my blog soon, I probs will take down some of my art so I guess save something if you like it a lot :T
I saw the blow up with DemiGhiraLink AU, and I admit I’ve been very fickle about offering you guys proper critique and advise for a while now, but seeing as you’re getting a lot of people telling you of their dislike now, I think offering advise is more beneficial to you than…
Yo how far back were you digging to find a critique posted over a year ago for an AU that has long since been abandoned. I’m going to have to fill you in on the context since you randomly jump into the argument a year after all’s been said and done, defending a standpoint not shared by the people this critique was for.
As a general rule, when critique is given, one’s story should be good enough that you don’t have to rely on excuses such as “YOU CAN WRITE ANYTHING YOU WANT IN FANFICTION” or worse, justify unbelievable characterisation and the distortion of an abuse or rape victim’s experience in the story with remarks such as “THEY’RE NOT REAL HUMANS”.
If you actually read the post properly, you would know I LIKED this AU. Loved the pairings, the kinks being used, the captor/captive relationship- I drew fucking fanart for it I liked it that much! Do not dismiss all critique as some petty complaint against someone elses personal taste. That would be subjective, THIS was objective critique, based on the fundamental rules of writing. It also happens to be a constructive critique as proven by the ADVISE I was giving them. So get the idea this is some petty “I don’t like what you like” post out of your head now. Much like retail, writing follows the rule that the AUDIENCE is always right. This rule was ignored by several writers in the AU who insisted they could dictate how an audience saw their work, instead of the work doing the storytelling for itself, like a story is, y’know, MEANT to.
So I made this post after I saw several people talk out against the AU along with seeing the creators of the AU constantly having to re-explain what the story was about, which contradicted what the story actually was. No writer should ever have to explain things or correct their audience’s interpretation, your work should mirror your intent and if you’re intent isn’t coming through to an audience, then your work needs revising. AKA what my post was HELPING with. I even gave them examples of how they could make it work.
The writers had kept stressing, they did not intend for it to be the rape-fest that it was. The character was meant to go through a lot of realistic phycological trauma - so much that an evil version of himself came into existence and harmed him further. Yet, it was meant to end in a happy, romantic threesome (of which they never figured out how to transition from one to the other - they wanted his captors to end up caring for him but never showed any alteration in their behaviours to show this and thus convince the audience their affection - along with the returned affection of their captive - was genuine) their approach and execution was so far away from their intent that it was coming across as insulting to all rape and abuse victim’s experiences that other people were getting rightfully offend and spoke out.
The problem that followed was some writers in the AU were still thinking they could dictate how people interpreted the story and threw misinformation of things like stockholm syndrome to try and justify it when if that really was what influenced the character’s behaviour by the end, the ending would be TRAGIC, not the healthy, mutual, romantic relationship they were saying the story ended with.
Now, your argument is that it’s fanfiction and so who cares, but that wasn’t THEIR argument. It would’ve been different if they were saying “meh it’s a guilty pleasure we weren’t aiming for realism or a serious plot”, but they seriously believed the scenario was well thought out, logical, believable, didn’t undermine the seriousness of abuse and rape and that a character could feel true, romantic love just because his enemies fucked him into submission - that stockholm syndrome could lead to a healthy, functional loving relationship as if developing the syndrome wasn’t a ‘bad’ thing at all.
Their story was the bastardisation of all abuse and rape victims’ experiences, and if you can’t see a problem with that I have no idea what else to say to you.
deniisu asked: Prompts still ok? If yes, Zero/X, MMX. Reploid skin is more sensitive than human's, so exploration of sensuality: soft fabrics, massages, touching, showers / baths, this kind of stuff :)
((hell yeah!! I’m just slow and forgetful ^_^ here ya go~))
Reploids, as a general rule, don’t touch each other.
The prompt itself was so totally perfect and oh gosh you executed it perfectly *A* It’s got the perfect mix of being as adorable as it is hot. You write both of them really well, too!
(Zero/X; RMX3 ending; Zero’s POV)
RATING: G (angst)
SUMMARY: Whenever X is this quiet you know not to push for answers, but the doubt is all across his face and you don’t know how to make it go away.
- - - -
You haven’t always been there at the end, you know, and this is only the second time you can stand next to him in true victory - but his demeanor is currently suggesting that victorious is far from how he feels.
You put an arm loosely around him and he barely manages a forced smile when he looks up at you. He doesn’t want to talk about it, whenever X is this quiet you know not to push for answers, but the doubt is all across his face and you don’t know how to make it go away.
If there was one thing that hurts for you to see, its when you see defeat in X’s eyes, gaze averted and spirit lost. A desperate urge to kiss it better was all you had to follow through with - getting rid of his helmet, treading fingers into short locks of hair and pressing soft kisses to his lips.
He’ll tell you what’s on his mind later, you’re sure, but you’re not going to wait till then to give him reassurance - because you know he needs it right now.
(Zero/X; RMZ2; X’s POV)
SUMMARY: He assures you that he’ll take care of Elpizo, protect your body then deal with Dark Elf himself and you really wish you could believe it was all that simple.